Jabbersnacky

Court
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Crimes of conviction,
a heinous addiction,
laws placed above all wrong, and right.

Swear on the bible,
to up hold what's tribal,
to blindfold your reason with fright.

Find guilty the witches,
the atheist bitches,
send swiftly the sinners into the night.

It's god's hand you are swinging,
righteous justice you're bringing,
for those who have wronged in your sight.

So bring forth the faggots,
burn the wicked and maggots,
God's on your side of this bloody fight.

Kill the babes, and the mothers,
The heretics brothers,
The angels are cheering your plight.

God's glory is waiting,
So continue your hating,
Amongst all the bodies his glory is bright.

A deep lake of fire,
Awaits those you desire,
Find comfort, and warmth in it's light.

Forget not your bible,
uphold what's tribal,
pray against knowledge with all of your might.

It god's laws you follow,
Though they seem empty, and hollow,
Take solace for you know you're right.

S.T. © 2002

Any feedback?

Hate it? sorta like it? Think it stinks more than fish after 4 days in the sun?

I'm thinking of adding it top my website, so that's why I'm searching for feedback.

(edited because my grammar sucks )

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One of the last sane

Set it to music. It ain't Auden, but it'd do okay as a song lyric.

Well, you asked for opinions.

GunnerJ

This might have better luck elsewhere...

ashes_of_infinity

I like it. It's got a decent rhythm - it flows well. It's *much* better than anything I could come up with. <img src="graemlins/notworthy.gif" border="0" alt="[Not Worthy]" />

It would do well as lyrics too, great song.

~ashes_of_infinity, chaotic and caffinated~

BigJim

It's got a nice beat, I could dance to it. I'll give it an 85.

Joel

I think it's great. Definitely agree it would make great song lyrics.

Proxima Centauri

Try submitting your poem at the following website.

<a href="http://home.freeuk.net/worldling/" target="_blank">http://home.freeuk.net/worldling/</a>

This is just the type of poem Worldling loves.
Worldling illustrates guest poems beautifully. Its a really cool site well worth a visit.

Jabbersnacky

Thanks everybody. sorry I didn't get back to thank you for the responses for a few days. Kids off for the summer, so I don't get online much. and when I do, I'm usually harassed by the I'm bored demon who's inhabiting my house for the summer.

Of course the poem was just for fun, but I think everyone got that.

A song not a bad idea some day the band I was in just might get back together someday.... or if not I could always pawn it off on someone else

thanks for the link B.Shack I'll check it out. I was searching the net a bit ago looking for anti religious poetry but I couldn't find anything, of course that was probably because I couldn't figure out what kind of keyword to use. that's what inspired me to try my hand at my own. I was trying to counter a whole heap of God poems that were posted on a favorite poem thread on a site. Why so many poets had to wright such suck ass stuff about God and heaven, it was really making my brain cringe.

Thanks again

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Proxima Centauri

Yesterday I visited my local public library and tried to read the new poems in Worldling's Website. I found to my horror that the guardians of public decency in Birmingham have blocked access to it at public library computers. I was inspired to write the following poem.

ON CENSORSHIP OF WORLDLING'S WONDERFUL WEBSITE BY BIRMINGHAM PUBLIC LIBRARIES.
(I don't know what's happening in the rest of the country.)


PART 1.

Oh Libraries of Birmingham,
Where noble thoughts and lofty stem.

Protect the people living here,
From blasphemy, both wild and queer.

For Worldling's irreligious search,
Offends the folk who go to Church.

And authors, some of high repute,
Say much the Christians won't refute.

So don't refute the things we say,
Instead just try to block display.


PART 2.


Yes Mary Whitehouse, pure of mind,
All things impure was sure to find.

Though Mary's dead, her Ghost's alive.
Attacking, should free speach arrive.

If with the libraries we go,
These cool designs we'll never know.

And poems great we'll never read.
Should Christian stuff be all we need?

So Libraries of Birmingham,
From you will free speach ever stem?

<img src="graemlins/boohoo.gif" border="0" alt="[Boo Hoo]" />

British people are sometimes narrow minded too. <img src="graemlins/notworthy.gif" border="0" alt="[Not Worthy]" /> Alas for my town and my country.
Now Birmingham people who like Worldling's material at public Internet access sites will have to pay at Internet Cafes or IT Centres.




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Waning Moon Conrad

I like it. You might like this, from Aleister Crowley -

He conjures up the loathly route,
of Christians crawling in and out,
a sight as lovely to the wise
as maggots in a maiden's eyes.